ReCharacter submission:Noelle Nightingale

[noellehalliwell]

[]• NOELLE & Nightingale •[]

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NAME: (Noelle, Emmy,Nightingale )
NICKNAME(S): Elle
DATE OF BIRTH: (June 14th)
AGE: 17
GENDER: Female
LINEAGE: ( half-blood witch/veela)
OCCUPATION/YEAR: (Well,she hopes to one day have a muggle career as a vet,she's 7th year.)
HOUSE: (Hufflepuff)
CANON?no


[]• GENERAL •
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WAND: (She does not care for one.)
BROOM: (N/A she prefers the old-fashioned mortal way,walking and driving.)
PET(S): (She has 3 dogs back in the states a Golden Lab named Furgoni,a Pittbull named Tasha,and a Yorkie named Rover.Plus,she just adopted an owl named Rayne.)

BOGGART: (She is absolutey terrified of clowns and sharks.When she saw Jaws she got absolutey terrified when the shark attacked the young woman.She saw a clown when she was at the circus one day and it jumped in front of her and completely scraed her.)
AMORTENTIA: (The smell for Noelle would be is Vanilla,because it reminds her of her grandmother.)
DEMENTOR: (Noelle witnesses the death of her grandmother Abagail Wales,who was murdered when she was only 14.)


[]• APPEARANCE •
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CELEBRITY CLAIM: (Kate Hudson)
HAIR COLOR:Blond
EYE COLOR:Brownish-Green
HEIGHT:5'9
WEIGHT:134
DETAILED: Hair:Noelle has such beautiful hair,thats what i really love.Her mother comes from a veela family tree and Noelle has inherited the classic veela charm.Her hair is very wavy and bouncy,she has natural blond hair,that when the sun hits her hair it reflects like when the sun touches the ocean.Her hair is rewaches about a couple of inches down to her shoulders,and at the tippy ends of her back dangles little specks of loosley wavy hair.Her hair sometimes gets very messy and frizzy when it s cold or hot out.She does not really take care of her hair she just lets be however she wants it to be,if messy then messy,she only does her hair when she feels like it.
Eyes:She has such a pretty set of eyes.Noelle's eyes are cute when she smiles you can see her eyes sort of slant when she smiles and shows off her dimples.Noelle's eye color is a mixture of brownish and greenish,her eyes will always light of the room when she enters a room.Noelle loves the fact that she inherited such pretty eyes from her mother and father.Noelle is supposed to wear glasses but she never wears them because shes just so obessed with her eyes.Everyone always tell her that when she gets angry that her eyes will look like they are on fire, when some people say that her eyes look like the midnight sky when she is angry.The best thing about Noelle is the best thing ever are her beutiful set of hevaningly eyes.


[]• PERSONALITY •
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LIKES: (5+)

• Animals
  
• Plants
  
• Reading
  
• Writing
  
• Drawing
  

DISLIKES: (5+)

• Math
  
• Mean people
  
• Vanity
  
• Pride
  
• Rudeness
  

STRENGTHS: (5+)

• Being a loyal friend.
  
• Being happy about for who she is.
  
• Never wanting to aminute on breaking rules.
  
• Noelle loves art.
  
• Noelle's cousin is her number one concern.
  

WEAKNESSES: (5+)

• Her unheatly food habit.
  
• The way she always firlts with every guy and always gets hurt.
  
• The habit she never shares.
  
• She can't stand seeing people hurt.
  
• She worries way to much.
  

DETAILED: Noelle is a very polite girl,when she's sees an elderly person she goes right up to help them.Noelle ses life as something not to take for granted,that is what her grandma has always taught her.Noelle trys not to show her flaws for example:when Noelle was 4 she had a doll that a local neighbour girl tired to play with her doll and Noelle grabbed her by the hair and dragged her alittle and the little girl started cring and noelle smacked over the head with her doll.From that time on Noelle threw hissy fits if she did not have her way.Now, we have Noelle's veela half comes out Noelle is very gourgous she uses her Veela half sometimes thought to an advantage when Noelle was in the high school in the united states she had failed a test once and she tired out the veela charm when her grandmother not to use her ability on men because that would show she is abusing her sel-respect as a woman and as a veela,when Noell found out she had failed the test she became a person you would not want to see,she transformed into a somewhat harpie looking thing,she grew a beak and feathers and she would launch fireball's at people she was infuriated with.Noelle is though a tough girl,she will not let anyone take her down.
Overall,Noelle is a nice typical girl.Noelle wants the normal things in life,Noelle sees that you can't always care for everyone.Noelle wants to see all people thogh being cared for but she does notwant to be taken advantage of either.Noelle was in many bad relationships because when it came to guys,her veela charm would come out and she would kind of have little reputation with the guys.Noelle just wants to really start over with a new fulfilling life.Noelle sees that not every guy is out for her looks and she just wants to see that she is a very good-hearted person and she will never want o hurt another living soul,while she still lives.Noell has taken her past life and put it behind her and she shall atart a new way of living.Hopefully hogwarts will see the smart and kind per she really is.



[]• HISTORY •
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FAMILY:

• FATHER: Arthur Nightingale (Died at the age of 33, Pure-blood wizard, Author)
  
• MOTHER: Autumn Wales (Died at the age of 28, Half-blood veela, Marine-biologists)
  
• OTHER: Grandma Abagial Wales (Died at the age of 75, Pure-blood veela, Retired Artists)Distint Cousin Melicca Evelake age:14 Half-blood witch/vampire she does not have a job yet.House:Ravenclaw Year:4th Grandpa Geogre Wales are:died at age 45 Pure-blood Wizard Job:headmaster at Salem Witches Institute Emily Watts age:56 Pure-bloodwitch Job:retired Author
  
  
  DETAILED: (Well,heres how Noelle's family started.Noelle's Grandmother is a veela from Greece.Abagail was somewhat of a very suductive woman in her younger years her true veela self always came out when she saw young muggle-men.Abagail had though a dark side when one young patricular man ignored her she grew her evil side,she grew into a harpie like state she grew a beak and feathers and her pretty eyes turned into a horrible reddish/grey color and she threw a fireball at the young man and nearly killed and ahe was furious.Abagail tired not to show her veela charm when it came to relationships.One day came when she left Greece in search of a new life.Abagail moved to America and started a new life as a Artist,that is were she met the love of her life American wizard Geogre Wales who was the Headmaster at the Salem Witches Institute.Abagail met him in a strange way she went to the local coffee shop and was standing in a long line waiting for her order to come when they called for a Geogre wales order she went up and said "Yes that's me"she said,she went up to grab the coffee when some man was ehading over for it.He said "Excuse me but are you Geogre Wales"'he asked."um yes Iam and Im taking my coffee and leaving",she said.Though after all that crazy happenings abagail and Geogre fell in love and married.Later,on after 3 years of marriage Abagail had some news to tell her husband she was pregnant, 9 monthes later they had their daugther Autumn Wales.Autumn attended The Salem Witches Insitute for 5 years but was pulled out after her father learned she was letting out her veela charm and used it on the nerds in the school so she could pass a few tests.Though a couple of years later Autumn met Pure-blood wizard Arthur Nightingale they married and had their beutiful daugther Noelle.
  Noelle's parent's died of a horrible car accident when she was very young she was then pulled out of her school and moved in with her grandmother and her grandmother taught her everything she knows today.Noelle's distint cousin on her mothers side parents died and she came live wtih her and her grandmother.Her name is Melicca Evelake, she is Half-blood vampire/witch.Her father is Vald Frankis a Vampire and he comes from Transylvania,Romania her father once was a vivous attacker and he used to show his fangs when he became very angry and he killed many innocent people and the Vampire Headquatars told him either he be beheaded or he shall be coming to change and try to regain his new soul,so he refrained from the horrible past of his and he did everything to keep his cool.Thena lttle while later he met his wife who was a Pure-blood witch Amelia Evelake and they married and had their daugther Melicca Evelake.Her parents though died in a fatal car aciccdent when she was a child.Melicca was the same as her father thogh she did not drink human blood she goes to blood banks and gets her feedings.Like her cousin Noelle she hopes to attend Hogwarts.Then,one fatal day comes Noelle and her cousin come home and see their grandmother dead laying on the floor blood comming out of her stomach she has been murdered, the girls are sad and angered for who could ever do such a thing,from then on they know of nothing or anyone to ever trust.They were then taken in by retired Author ho atted Hogwarts once Emiyl Watts.)
  
  
  []• ROLE-PLAY •
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  OTHER CHARACTERS?no
  IF SO, WHO?Not,yet
  
  SAMPLE: (Noelle sits underneath the tree at her lakeside house.At her grandmother's funeral. Noelle's cousin comes out,she sits next to her and they are both crying like crazy."How could someone be so cruel,"they both cryed.They,had magical species of all kinds that had attended the funeral.Then,a few weeks later they got a letter,from Hogwarts the letter informed them that their grandfather was once honored student at hogwarts and they had heard about the murder of their gradmother,and that they would be taken in by Emily Watts a retired Author who once also attened hogwarts.The girls had all their needs ready Noelle was on the train along with her cousin.Noelle hoped that she could get a new start. Noelle was looking around when they had reached Hogwarts.Noelle was gathered with all of the other students and so was her cousin."Alright then you two girls shall be sorted first",said Professor McGonagall.Noelle's cousin stepped up first and she was sorted into Raveclaw.Noelle was next."Well,hello Noelle I remember your Grandfather as here once",he was a very smart young man."I see you miss your family terribly",he said."Yes,I do and I have no one except for my cousin",Noelle thought in her head.The sorting hat had found that she was a kind,strong,and caring person.The sortig hat also saw that noelle was a very big-animal lover and cared for all living creatures.The sorting hat then decieded that Noelle shall be sorted into hufflepuff.
  
  
  
  
  

[• QUEEN OF HEARTS •]

Thank you for taking time to redo your application and submit it again. I appreciate that you took the time to do it. I do, however, still have problems with your application.

• CODE! I specified that you need to follow the code. I spent about thirty minutes of my life coding an application and explaining what needs to be done in the code. The least you can do is use the code and do as I have asked. If you cannot do that, please do not continue to submit your applications as it would be a pointless waste of time.
  
  
• SPECIAL LINEAGE! Great, you applied for a veela! Where is the proof that you can handle playing a veela? Where is the proof that you now what you're talking about? There is none. That's the problem. You should settle on a regular character of either pureblood, half-blood, or Muggle descent. You can't skip steps and play special lineage characters unless you know regular lineage ones first.
  
  
• WAND! What the hell do you mean she doesn't care for a wand? This is a Harry Potter role-play site, not a Charmed one or anything else. Students are required in their first year to purchase a wand. Without a wand, she cannot attend Hogwarts and obtain a magical education. No one cares if she wants a wand or not, but it is a requirement. She has to have a wand, whether you want her to have one or not.
  
  
• TRANSPORTATION AND BOGGART! So she doesn't like flying. That's okay, but how many wizards and witches do you see, especially in the 1970s, driving in cars? She can walk around all she wants, though. I'm not saying to give her a broom, but she's not driving around in a car all the time either. Yes, the Weasleys had a car in the books, but that was in the 1990s. Besides, Mr. Weasley had a fetish with Muggle devices.
  
  For her Boggart: she can be scared of clowns and sharks, but I honestly doubt that a witch would have watched Jaws. Sure, it's possible, but magical folks are not into watching movies and television because they don't really have such devices in their home unless they are Muggleborn.
  
  
• MARY SUE! As I said in your other application: Mary Sue loves everyone, but no one likes her--except maybe you. Your appearance is so amazingly Mary Sue that I can't even figure out where to start telling you to edit. Sure, she can have beautiful hair and eyes, but not everything about her can be beautiful, okay? Using words like "beautiful" to describe her or "heavenly" to describe her eyes is unacceptable. It only shows how perfect you are trying to make your character. Just because she "doesn't care about how she looks" doesn't mean you're not making her a Mary Sue.
  
  
• PERSONALITY! Piece of crap. You're trying to make her sound good while at the same time putting out a bunch of bad aspects of her personality that she tries not to show. And saying that she is a "nice girl" makes her more Mary Sue than she was before. Sure, she can be nice, but she can't be a "nice girl."
  
  
• HISTORY! Her family is all dead. They all died at a young age. This is yet another Mary Sue attribute. Also, why is she attending a Muggle school if she is part witch, part veela? Veelas are made for a magical world, not a Muggle one. Also, why is she coming from the States?
  
  Oh, and to answer the question that you asked me in the personal message: NO! Your character cannot have a DISTANT relative that is a part vampire. Sorry. You're not exercising the ability correctly to actually have that privilege.
  
  
• ROLE-PLAY SAMPLE! She's sitting under a tree at her grandma's funeral. A few weeks later, she got her letter to Hogwarts. She went to Hogwarts and got into Hufflepuff. How does any of that flow together? NONE of it flows. That's not a sample post, sorry.
  
  
• TYPOS AND MISSPELLINGS! Again, you had a lot of typos and misspellings. There are tools to help prevent this, like Microsoft Word and the spell check here on this site. If you're not the best typist or spelling, it is advised that you use the tools given to you. They're not there for good looks or just to be there; they're there for a reason. USE THEM!
  
  
• CAPITALIZATION AND PUNTUATION! You didn't capitalize a lot of proper nouns. You didn't add a lot of punctuation where it is necessary.
  
  
• TENSE AND TIME! THIRD PERSON POINT-OF-VIEW, PAST TENSE! Is that really that hard of a concept to understand?
  
  
• ABOUT YOU! How old are you really? In your other application and in your profile, it says that you are seventeen (17). By the looks of your application and failure to follow rules, I am really starting to believe otherwise. My sister is twelve, and she knows when to capitalize things and when she needs to add commas and such. My brother is thirteen and knows many of the same things. They're not perfect at it or even the best, but they know a lot more than what you appear to be displaying. They are both in special education programs at school, too. And let me not forget to mention that our school system is REALLY crappy and doens't have the best teachers in the world.
  
  If you really are seventeen, you should not be displaying such poor writing skills, especially if you are in your junior or senior year of high school. If you're not really that age, fess up. And if you're under the age of thirteen, you may as well leave because you're not allowed to be here.

Two strikes. One more, you're out. No more chances. Again, you have the same choices as last time: redo your application, again, or leave the site. It's your choice.

DENIED.